059 V02 — INDEPENDENT CRITIC B REVISION REVIEW
VISUAL CONSTRUCTION: PASS.
FULL REAL-TIME AUDIOVISUAL ACCEPTANCE: INCONCLUSIVE / pending playback and sound audition.

Method: Preserved CRITIC_B.txt as my independent V01 response. For V02 inspected all four actual ordered main sheets and all four actual control sheets across 0.00–37.21 seconds. Extracted additional native 960x720 main MP4 frames at 12.50 and 30.50; decoded and inspected all 45 output frames at 30 fps from 32.80 to 34.30 in temporal order, displayed at 480 pixels wide. I did not use the builder's ball_exact image, source timeline, ledger or another critic report. The parent supplied a description of the proposed revision before this viewing, so this is a revision review, not a blind first viewing. No native real-time playback or audio audition. The dense whole-film V01 inspection remains relevant to unchanged structure, but I do not claim to have independently decoded all V02 frames. Closing-title text is excluded as explanation.

The bread repair is clearly visible and improves the intended hinge. Around 12.00–14.25 the centered brown roll on its side plate has a visible scalloped/lobed perimeter. The hand-held torn roll is now peripheral rather than the competing central target. At 12.50 the brown roll's entire outer shape is plainly visible; the irregularity reads as material contour, not as fingers occluding an uncertain circle. The release around 14.50–15.00 reveals the larger dinner arrangement and makes the located roll part of a setting. That is a stronger and less ambiguous transition than V01's hand/gap/crumb competition.

The ending repair also improves observable continuity. The held ball around 29.50–32.00 is lower, against the foreground boy's shoulder/head rather than isolated high on the curtain. It occupies the central region at a diameter consistent with the other anchors. The partial overlap with the boy is visible, but the ball's round surface and enough perimeter remain readable. The broader frame then restores context. In the exact output-frame run beginning 32.80, the ball is initially beside the boy, moves upward/right, reaches the upper-right boundary and disappears; the foreground boy subsequently turns. The path is an actual observable departure across successive decoded frames. Around 33.20–33.43 the upward/right movement and exit are especially clear; these times are approximate frame-run readings, not a claim of playback perception. This establishes more than a still followed by an already-absent ball. I cannot independently establish original source speed or absence of retiming without source comparison, and have not done so.

Whole construction remains readable: approximately 0–12 seconds keeps a central round region through clock, dark opening, projector reel, diaphragm, bright lamp and smooth dark surface among clear round forms. Around 12–20 seconds, an irregular edible object opens into meal/action/aftermath. Around 20–29.25, terminal array, iris, record label and hand-held reel re-establish the circular relation with more perspective and context variation. Around 29.50–34.25, ball and boys provide a second contextual opening and motion exit. The eye is still the strongest material/function change. The correspondence survives without the closing explanatory text.

Control: V02 control keeps the same contextual actions and revised ball state but loses the stable diameter/location through earlier shots. It reads as a collection of round objects more readily than an anchored chain. Main is materially stronger for the stated visual criterion. Control's fuller image windows remain less conspicuous as a framing device, while main's small early clock/opening windows and changing black margins are noticeable costs. These costs do not defeat the central correspondence.

Largest remaining gap is unchanged: approximately 17.00–20.00, reverse dinner aftermath. Bread, plate and water glass stay nearly unchanged for roughly three seconds after the more specific hand action. It may be an effective rest in actual playback; sheets do not establish that necessity. I retain this pacing reservation rather than declaring it resolved by unrelated bread/ball changes. It is not a visual-construction failure: the interruption and return are still unambiguous.

Observable optional repair: Compare a version removing 1.0–1.5 seconds from the middle of that reverse dinner hold, preserving its entrance and the return cut. Retain the longer one if the shorter loses the felt division between geometric chain and contextual interruption; shorten if both preserve that distinction and the shorter reduces waiting. This needs real-time viewing. No further image substitution or text explanation is called for by my inspection.

V02 is visually stronger than V01: irregular roll now has a distinct visible perimeter, and the final path visibly leaves the frame. I accept the visual construction and recommend preserving those repairs. I do not certify felt cadence, sound-picture fit, or final audiovisual acceptance from sampled/static inspection.